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Tuesday, 9 July 2013
Epic Citadel - By Logan
As I stumbled up the old battered cobblestone road I could see a passage way in the darkness.
It was early morning the lights were flickering and the owls were hooting. As it got lighter it became easier to see where I was going. My feet were aching it felt like I had been walking on fire.
I like how you put some feeling into it.e.g My feet were aching it felt like I had been walking on fire.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you set the scene eg "It was early morning the lights were flickering and the owls were hooting."
ReplyDeleteJack
I liked the sentences you had, they packed full of description but it could have been even better if it was a bit longer.
ReplyDeleteTom