I stared back at the dusty dirt road I had just hiked up as I strolled through the entrance way. The lime green vines climbing up the brick castle wall. The sun was beating down on my back.The cobbled road I was walking on, was crumbling under my feet like bread crumbs.
I started walking and took note of my surroundings. There was a big old building that had the right features to be a church it had overgrown plants outside of it and it looked like it would fall to pieces if you touched it. The air smelt really bad and I could taste the dust that was settling all around the old abandoned city.
I sauntered out of the ancient city as it was starting to send chills down my spine.As I was on my way out I saw dozens of fruit stands which explained the bad smell, the fruit was decomposing and was all shriveled up and brown. I reached the cities entrance way and looked at the mix of greens and brown landscape in front of me with tents almost as high as the city itself standing tall and proud in front of me in there shining bright colors.
Cool great interesting and descriptive. I loved it and you made every word count and you bring your personality into the story.
ReplyDeleteThis is a really descriptive and cool story the first sentence just wants to make you read more, I also really liked how you wrote: The lime green vines climbing up the brick castle wall. It gives personfication by saying the vines climbed up the wall instead of saying something like: the vines were on the wall.
ReplyDeleteThis is very descriptive. I liked the whole bit about the smell and rotting fruit. I really wondered what was going to happen next.
ReplyDeletei like how you explained how the air smelt. Nice peice of writing.
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