His
day started badly. The rain was bucketing down, making his floppy hair
stick to his forehead. He missed his bus to school and he had only
walked half way when he realised he was squelching: there was a hole in
one of his trainers.
As
he bent down to check the damage, his luck suddenly changed. Sitting in
the gutter was an Iphone. Sheltering from the rain inside its grey
silicon case, camouflaging it into the street.
He
picked it up, wiped it against his school trousers and pressed it back
to life. So what if it was only 8 gigs; he wasn’t fussy.
His sock was still wet at lunch break, but it barely crossed his mind.
“So, who’s the guy that owned it?” Called his friend Jed from across the class.
“Girl.” he corrected, showing him the wallpaper of the girl and her friends.
“Check her Facebook” Jed suggested, kicking the ball up into his hands.
Still
logged in. Eva Sullivan. Goes to Kapiti College. It was only a twenty
minute walk away from his school. The smile dropped from his face. He
was beginning to feel guilty about what he’d done.
He
unzipped his blazer pocket and pulled out a pair of entangled
earphones, deciding to listen to some of Eva’s music to take his mind
off things; her play list wasn’t half bad, but strangely the lyrics were
repeating: “bring it back.”
Just a fault from being dropped in the rain, he thought wearily.
Enough
music for now, he thought, and decided to email his friend Braydon and
skite about his lucky find. But it wasn’t Braydon who replied:
‘Why are you using my iPhone, it doesn’t belong to you?’
The message had come from Eva Sullivan.
Enough
was enough. This was getting out of hand, and way too scary. The school
bell rang, snapping him back into reality. He was already in town so if
he ran to the police station, it wouldn’t take long. His feet carried
him as fast as they would go to the front step of the station, shoulders
aching from the weight of his backpack. There was no turning back now.
“Um, hi.” said the boy, clutching the phone to his waist.
“Hello young man.” “How can I help you today?” The police officer smiled, taking a sip of his coffee.
His lips pursed together, as he placed the phone on top of a stack of paperwork.
“I think someone’s missing this.” he said.
The officer shone another grin. “You did the right thing.”
He gave a slight nod, avoiding eye contact.
‘I
did the right thing.’ the boy thought to himself. He left the police
station smiling. Not noticing the large puddle and the holey trainer
that was about to step into.
It looked like his day was back on track.
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ReplyDeleteNice job Niamh.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you strait away pulled the reader in i wanted to read til the end!
The character description was good.
I liked how you told us what sort of character he was without giving to much away. ie: 'So what if it was only 8 gigs; he wasn’t fussy'.
Nice.
This piece of writing is really good Niamh, I like how you finished it with the "Not noticing the large puddle and the holey trainer that was about to step into.
ReplyDeleteIt looked like his day was back on track." It really made The ending connect to the start and makes your writing more interesting and better to read.